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    Kiyami
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    Before I read chapter three, I went back and read the first two completely, and I must complement on the improvement. As with the first two, you’re really good with keeping the characters in character, and I even found myself laughing a few times throughout the chapter. Only things I noticed that could still use improvement are mainly related to punctuation and keeping in tense. There weren’t many grammar or spelling errors left, and the sentences had better flow. As I finished chapter three, the last thing Ryoko said echos through my head, and I’m very much awaiting the next chapter of your fan fiction.

    And that’s my short review of Chapter Three. *passes out muffins and some sake*