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    For Washuu
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    Okay, I haven’t finished chapter 3.5, so I decided to pull this one from way, way, waaaaayyyy further along in the story-line.

    The back-story on it is that Washuu ran an experiment on me to copy my knowledge of music to her own mind. To test this, we have a drum duel, and…

    Dual Parallel Drumming Adventure

    “So then, Elliot shall we begin?”

    The boy looked to Washuu and nodded.

    The diminutive genius pressed a button on the tape deck mounted into her studio’s 19″ rack and swiftly moved back to the drumset constructed on one end of the room. High bass notes swept over the room like the backwash of a spaceship’s engine, and the boy wondered why Washuu had insisted on setting the volume so high. But he didn’t wonder for long, for the song had started!

    Thump-Thump-Thump-Thump went the scientist’s foot on her bass pedal, matching the beat of over-bearing wall of sound falling on the two of them.

    Elliot’s foot had already started moving, but not his right foot. His high-hats snapped along with the drive of the opposing bass drum and his gaze leveled at his redheaded challenger. Instinctively his stick came down -Bam-Bam- from one high-tom to the next and seemed to roll from the floor tom to the base. Thra-boom!

    Washuu caught on to a bit of his method and began to click her high-hats as well as she took the next lead-Brrabababam…badabada-bup-bum-BAH!- and ended with a her hand muting the cymbal she had just hit. Her eyes narrowed at the the boy.

    And the beat drove on. Thump-Thump-Thump-Thump…

    The next second both drummer’s sticks came down at the same time, pounding out their rhythms like two battalions of artillery making a sounding on each other.

    -Da-dududu-Da-dududu-BASH! Fu-doom-ba-doom-Crack-

    Bam-buboom-bam-buboomBASH! Da-du-domm-doom-Crack-

    And the beat drove on.

    After half a minute, the music lulled back and the two stayed their hands. But not their feet. Their feet kept moving, dancing like a pair of boxers waiting for the other to drop its guard.

    The music shifted, and both recognized it as the point when the rest of the band would soon come in on the tape, and raised a stick, each, above a crash as if to say ‘this moment is mine!’. One looked to the other, and the other looked back. Both quailed for a second as the point in the music grew closer and the tune itself began to crescendo, but their looks hardened at each other for just a fraction of a second before the downbeat, and both drummers, back by six years of instinct, laid on the opening beat with a passionate hammering of cymbal, snare, and bass all at once, seeming to tear at the very structure of the music itself.

    The next instant, all was a flurry of sound as both drummers, casting aside turn or regard to their opposer, blasted beats and parodies at each other like waves of energy.

    And the beat drove on, and on, and on.

    Either one of the players only an hour before had been a different creature. Only an hour ago, the drummer at the one set had been just a boy with two pieces of wood and an idea. Only an hour ago, the countering drummer had been a scientist with loads of sound equipment, but no two beats in her head.

    Now, they were musical enemies, Now they had, as the African once said, ‘been possessed by the spirit of the drum’, and weren’t about to stop their doubles and rolls and riffs and flares for the whims of anyone in the real world. THEY were drumming.

    And the beat drove on.

    The intensity gradually rose as the two drummers each locked into the groove they had found for the music emanating from the sound system. Cymbals crashed like a torrent of raindrops hitting an old tin roof and drums sounded off like a mile-line of howitzers continuously volleying each other.

    The beat drove on, and again the music kicked it up a notch as the patterns of the two drummers became more focused as the end of the song grew near. They didn’t know it was, yet they could tell. They could FEEL the song coming to an end as it crescendo’ed, and then…

    With a final, jarring blow that cracked Elliot’s cymbals and sent a run through the drum-head on Washuu’s snare, the two drummers were themselves once again. They sat dazed and panting for a minute, stooped over their respective instruments as sweat poured over them like a soft, salty rain.

    With absolutely wrong timing to the scene, the blank spot in the tape ended, and the next song unceremoniously started blaring away through the speakers.

    “AWW, CUT IT OUT.” groaned Washuu (after her near-heart-attack), and a deftly thrown stick landed on the power button to the rack before clattering to the floor below. The scientist returned to her slumped state. But something bothered her.

    The boy, who was bolt upright from the shock of the next track hitting him, also loosened a little as he realized the same thing Washuu had.

    The two looked at each other, one-Washuu-with mischief, and the other-Elliot-with a slightly worried expression.

    “Did we…” Elliot began.

    “I believe so, Elliot.” Washuu replied. She paused for a minute and stared off vacantly. “My, my, my. The odds of such a thing happening are astronomical.” She suddenly broke out in a huge grin and clasped she hands together.

    “THINK of it, Elliot! We’ve just been part of an anomaly in the laws of chance! Horay!”

    “Say what you’d like, but I think that us playing the same drum part for six minutes is a bit too creepy for me.” Said Elliot with a slight cringe.

    “Aw, come on. One minute for every year of experience you gave me, right?” Washuu retorted.

    “Something like that.”

    =+=+=+=+=+=

    After this, we get the idea to do the same to the other members of the house.

    Now imagine mature-form Ryo-Ohki tearing out the most amazing guitar solos you can possibly immagine, ne?

    And can Mihoshi play bass?

    :scared:

    And can Ayeka and Ryoko share a love song to Tenchi?

    :fight:

    You’ll see… when I get to this part of the story… in a few… decades. :?

    As for now, you actually can leave a comment, just in case you were wondering. ;D

    -es

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      i have come to realize something my freind.

      can you speak fluent Japanese? im not sure but would there be a language barrier in your self insertion fanfic?

      it would definitely cause some ruckus with the family in my opinion, including some really funny misunderstandings ( a good one i dreamed up being you realizing you don’t have a razor, thus forcing you to use one of the girl’s razor whether you get caught in the act or not.)

      but don’t let my opinion shift your story plot, all it takes is a simple sentence saying that washu created a translator just for you that broadcasts to everyone in hearing range. you might include a few chapters that show her teaching you Japanese/jurian

      (if jurain is actually a different language i don’t know.)

      im definitely going to incorporate a language barrier in my fanfic but only for a non main character scene, just to show that its there.

      going to work soon so ill repost with my critique on this part later today.

      For Washuu
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      Please do critique when you get the time.

      As for language, I have specifically set this FF in the US-rendition of Tenchi Muyo. This way, the characters are consistent in matters of speech. (Eg, we all know how Ayeka has a very distinct turn-of-phrase, do to her royal upbringing. In America, we did the best to parallel this: Queen’s English… sort of.)

      Language barrier… this is one that I have contemplated in the past, and, as I have stated, decided to remain away from.

      Except for that one eppisode: 😈

      My note on the idea is as follows [spoiler, sort of]:

      Note 42:

      One day everyone but me speaks Japanese. No one can figure out why. The recordings of them are in English [so this part is after index point 38]. The 3rd person perspective is flexible in the sense that, if the focus is on me, everyone else in unintelligible, and, if the focus is on anyone else, I don’t make sense. Washuu has a translation pad which she has me use to talk to the rest of the house. Or really just to her, and then she leaves me on my own for the rest of the house [and her] after briefing the people around the house to use as much non-verbal/non-oral language when answering/talking to me. I go back to my laptop to get my list of Japanese phrases and brainstorm.

      Eventually, I find one of the phrases said around the house (compared to English) to be incorrect. I get my laptop and pull up whatever episode of TM it is that has the word in it, and parallel the subtitles with it. I then switch the language to English to stress my point as to the phrase meaning what I said it did. And everyone speaks English.

      What I first hear is Ryoko, who was the contester on the meaning of the phrase, and she shouts out some obscene “I told you so” type thing, and I start. She mockingly asks me if I’m still upset with her language, and I shakily ask her to say that again. She starts to swear again, but stops when she realizes that we’re speaking the same language.

      I look to VLC, and say “So is that.”

      What originally happened is that I had been watching a TM episode, and had switched the language to Japaneese. When Sasami called “Elliot” for dinner, I cut her off with an “I’m coming!” and shut down the laptop. (Sasami looks at me funny when I pass he in the doorway, because I replied in English when she would have spoken in Japaneese, so it was gibberish.) When I got to dinner is when I noticed everyone speaking in Japaneese, so I didn’t relate the language change to the one in VLC.

      [end note]

      How’s that?

      (And, no, I don’t speak Japanese. I do speak anime, and I’m fluent and have finesse when it comes to titular suffixes.)

      i can say with certainty that i agree and i find that method to be justified.

      Nice job explaining that my friend! i never thought of that.

      as for the critique the only major problem with this (to me) is that alot of the equipment used in the drum sets are a mystery to me.

      i am not an avid music person, i like music but i don’t know the difference between a Bass and a Treble(are those even instruments?) thus some thing threw me off a little.

      “The diminutive genius pressed a button on the tape deck mounted into her studio’s 19″ rack and swiftly moved back to the drumset constructed on one end of the room.”

      i have no idea what a studio 19 is…. maybe a short description would help us new generations with our mp3 players…

      “Washuu caught on to a bit of his method and began to click her high-hats as well as she took the next lead-Brrabababam…badabada-bup-bum-BAH!- and ended with a her hand muting the cymbal she had just hit. Her eyes narrowed at the the boy.”

      I never would have guess thehy were wearing high hats… once again i’ll play the role of the stupid reader and wonder….

      “The next second both drummer’s sticks came down at the same time, pounding out their rhythms like two battalions of artillery making a sounding on each other.”

      Nice use of symbolism!

      “After half a minute, the music lulled back and the two stayed their hands. But not their feet. Their feet kept moving, dancing like a pair of boxers waiting for the other to drop its guard.”

      i think that there still playing the big drum at the bottom and not dancing right?

      as i said the story is well written its plot and plot advancement is well written, but when it comes to the technical, we don’t know what you know.

      you may know tons about drums and guitars, but think about the audience, what is the possibility they find this fanfiction while searching for music fanfiction?

      chances are slim, people will find your fanfiction whilst searching for tenchi muyo fanfiction; thus they may not know everything about a different subject( the same goes for the show as well not everyone knows everything about tenchi muyo; or as much as you may know)

      all in all just remember that your readers cannot read your mind; they wont know what a bass drum, or a treble note is.

      when i write i pretend my audience is stupid (NOT THAT ANY OF THEM EVER ARE!!) that they don’t know anything about something i know about. thus i describe everything(try to anyways im still working on it myself) i can to prevent them wondering about what a high-hat is(the one thing you NEVER want is your reader getting distracted; for instance if i don’t know what a high-hat is i may stop reading your story to go google High-hats; you don’t want this as they tend to never come back to finish the read.) this can be prevented by simply getting the picture of the object into their heads, Mind implants can work but describing them tends to be less messy :p

      once again i’d like to state that im not flaming you or bashing or looking down upon you as a writer i am giving you my advice on your papers, and hopefully helping you along with your fanfiction.

      hope this helps!

      BestRegards Shadowmann2330

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      No worries, Shadowman! 😆 😆 😆

      Yes, I take great liberties in this bit, and, to be honest, I don’t think I’ll ever change this chapter to explain musical things or studio tings… probably the whole thing will be a side-story to the main plot at the time.

      And I’ll probably have a “Must See First” link (before the story) to a picture of a drum set with all relevant parts labeled.

      Let’s see…

      19″ [Nineteen Inch] Rack: The thing you see equipment mounted in. This one is the most common commercial size: 19 inches wide. (And, knowing Washuu, probably very tall.]

      :washu:

      Hi-Hats: NOT top-hats. 😆 😆 :mrgreen: ;) Hi-Hats are this: http://www.long-mcquade.com/files/2309/lg_HH905.jpg

      Usually, and in this case, they are located on the left side of a drum set. (when viewed from the player’s perspective.)

      And as for the dancing, you got that one right on. 8-) The use of comparison, in that case, is called ‘simile’ (Not ‘Smile’), and it’s the one thing in this whole piece that my Lit teacher seemed to like. 🙄 Well, I can’t really complain- she did have high standards.

      Oh, yeah! When you said “Nice use of symbolism”, it made me laugh, because “Cymbalism” is fluent or clever use of cymbals. 😆 Cymbals… you do know what those are, right?

      AND….. as a bonus (and mainly because I forgot to put it in the last post) here’s the music I based this chapter off of:

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YL0WI3VfGPc

      {Epic song…}

      Thanks again for the critique!

      Sweet Jesus

      the rack was a piece of equipment?!?

      i thought it was washu’s breast size

      Haggens agrees

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y-Z1VFRZ5MM

      That was the greatest thing i have ever seen in my entire life.

      as alwyaly you are so very welcome sir!

      For Washuu
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      shadowmann2330 wrote:

      …i thought it was washu’s breast size

      -_-

      With a tape deck mounted in it??!?? :|

      ookamilord
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      nice story.
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