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    susano wrote:

    There is a reference of what happen to the previous Jurian Emperor in the move Tenchi Muyo in Love. The Jurian Emperor had died one hundred years before the events of the movie. The Emperor’s death was a result of stopping the criminal Kain.

    I would not necessarily say “the previous” Jurai emperor. Washu and the Operative both refer to a Juraian emperor who died by expelling his energy to help the Galaxy Police imprison Kain.

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    The Operative does mention the “current Jurai emperor”, who likely assumed the role after Kagato’s defeat (Universe episode 25) and Ayeka’s departure (Universe episode 26).

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    However, was there no emperor from Kain’s time in 1896 until Kagato’s coup in 1995? That seems unlikely. Washu’s dialogue in particular might imply that there were two Jurai emperors between 1896 and 1995. I think this might be possible since the lineage would have to shift from Yosho’s branch family to Ayeka’s as she mentions in Universe episode 23.

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    susano wrote:

    Yosho had left Jurai sometime before the Earth year 1896. Yosho had travel alone across the galaxy until he came upon the Earth. After arriving on Earth. Yosho had decided to stay on the Earth. He did meet Achika’s mother sometime after his arrival.

    As Tenchi Muyo! in Love 2 is the direct sequel to Tenchi Muyo! in Love, and Universe by extension, I do not agree with your assessment. The plot of the film tells that Haruna left Jurai with Yosho since they were forbidden to marry, but she died shortly after arriving in Earth’s orbit. Some time later, Yosho met Masaki Itsuki, Achika’s mother, and became “Masaki Katsuhito”.

    Moreover, in this continuity, Yosho likely did not leave Jurai a century ago. As stated in the the other thread, several details seem to imply that Yosho and Haruna left Jurai about 50-60 years prior to the film. Moreover, Haruna’s English dialogue mentions that she waited for “half a century”. That would place the couple leaving Jurai in 1930-1940, not the 19th Century.

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    wwwwhhhhoooo wrote:

    Could be, but I wonder if Ayeka was even alive before Yosho left. If (and it is “if” only) Pii is correct (which I must say I wouldn’t doubt, he’s done his homework) in his assumption that Jurains naturally age at the same rate as Earthlings, and there’s no mention in Universe context of Jurain trees extending one’s life (I’m ashamed to say it, but I can’t quite remember, proves I need to rewatch!), and if Ayeka in Universe was not travelling in stasis across the stars for an extended period when we’re introduced to her (again, must rewatch! someone chime in if they remember), based on her age and Yosho’s at their meeting on Earth, she couldn’t have even been born yet. Lot of if’s.

    What he said. mmhmm1

    wwwwhhhhoooo wrote:

    I myself wished to chime in here because I forgot to post my simplified, direct answer to the original question “why did Yosho leave Jurai?” Similar reason to OVA: he likely felt constricted by the ‘über-politics’ of Jurai and sought a quieter life. It’s still interesting to wonder how Haruna fit into the equation (was she rejected by Yosho’s parent(s)? If so, why? If she wasn’t, was Yosho still not content living on Jurai with the woman he loved?), but if Universe Jurai is anything the least bit like OVA Jurai, a go-with-the-flow, free spirit young Yosho likely felt stifled by the responsibilities of rule.

    I could certainly believe that Jurai was stifling. Look at Ayeka throughout Universe. She is dying to get away from her responsibilities as crown princess, and if Yosho’s life there had any similarities, I could see him seeking escape as well. Even Sasami mentions to Mirei that she does not like having to be so proper all the time.

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    As far as his parents accepting Haruna, that could be implied. After all, I would bet that if Yosho’s father did not want them together, he would make sure they were not. Haruna’s English dialogue in the last flashback does say they “couldn’t be happy there”. Even then, Azaka and Kamidake’s dialogue to Sasami in both languages states that Yosho was forbidden to marry her. What it is specifically could likely be debated.

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    Yosho24 wrote:

    It’s a shame that the universe continuity of Yosho’s past wasn’t as fleshed out as his OVA counterpart’s.(I’m referring to the Yosho novel.) It would have made for some truly interesting story arcs.

    Universe Yosho’s backstory would be an interesting read, although leaving it a mystery does leave the fun for speculation. Tenchismile

    mitsuki lover wrote:

    Though as a priest wouldn’t he have been exempted from any military service,if indeed their arrival was around

    1938?

    When Tenchi Forever does flashback to Yosho in Japan it does seem to be during a period of relative calm and peace,so I wonder if it might have been just before the Military took over the government.

    I am not certain about Japan’s policies regarding military service for clergy. However, Chuck and I have discussed that Yosho might have arrived before Japan became embroiled with China in the 1930s. Also, some of this depends on when Yosho became “Masaki Katsuhito” and a priest. Involvement with Japan’s government or military might be more of an issue while he was wandering around Japan between Haruna’s death and his marriage to Itsuki.

    wwwwhhhhoooo wrote:

    This all adds up pretty squarely to me, provided that the distance between the two worlds doesn’t factor in [significantly] with the whole time/space relativity thingy affecting time/people’s age/exact birth date from Earth’s perspective* (interesting how as far as travel goes, Universe ships don’t seem to use the wormhole approach utilized by Azusa in OVA)

    I was assuming that Yagami, Ryo-Ohki, and such had FTL capability, which is why they are able to cross from Earth to Jurai in a matter of months rather than centuries. I did neglect such matters in my estimates. Sorry that threw anything off. blush1

    wwwwhhhhoooo wrote:

    I would guess Yosho would have stayed out of the conflict, 1) he seems to have pacifist tendencies, despite being a lethal killing machine, 2) which side would he take? sure, Japan seems obvious, it’s his home, but even though his family ends up being Japanese, he would likely still see himself as an outsider looking in, a foreigner on the edge of a conflict between two groups of Earthlings (though if it ever came to it, of course he’d defend his homestead and family) but that’s just my guess.

    mitsuki lover wrote:

    Then the question would be how much of a Pacifist is Yosho?

    SilverWhisper wrote:

    It seems logical Universe Yosho/Katsuhito stayed out of World War II, but was involved with the mourning period afterwards as a priest, and established his own judgement of humanity as more “gentle” than Juraian beings.

    After chatting with everyone, I would expect Yosho would keep out of Earth’s internal nonsense. Considering he would have lost Haruna in recent memory and battled Kagato before that, he likely would not be looking for more trouble. He might just hide out in the countryside, or as some others have mentioned in minichat and Mumble, Yosho/Katsuhito might have helped with the relief or reconstruction efforts after the war. That might be the best role for him in his new life as a priest.

    mitsuki lover wrote:

    btw:I would take it that Yosho would have been somewhere in his 20s when he left Jurai and settled in Japan,

    if he arrived just shortly before Pearl Harbor was bombed.That is taking 1953 as the birth year for his daughter.

    So we can guess he was born around 1918-1922.

    That sits pretty well with my original post on that. Tenchismile

    SilverWhisper wrote:

    Unless you mean the Okayama Prefecture, it’s established in the OVA continuity the setting is closer Kurashiki City.

    Unless Google Maps has this wrong, Kurashiki and Okayama are about 10 mi apart, so the distance is negligible in an age with automobiles.

    SilverWhisper wrote:

    Also in the Universe continuity, before Nobuyuki married into the family and expanded the house, it was shown to have always existed in the hills, thus would have been unaffected from the bombing of coastal lowlands, which were mostly industrial.

    He might have likely seen refugees from the city, particularly those fleeing for sanctuary of a shrine to escape the bombardments. Even then, he would likely hear and feel the rumbles from distant explosions from ~10 mi away. Considering the scale of the conflict, I have a hard time believing he could remain ignorant, unaffected, or completely idle during that era.

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    ookamilord wrote:

    but the one ayeka went thru sound more like the enlightenment and acceptance to find who you are.

    I would certainly agree with this. mmhmm1

    ookamilord wrote:

    i went on a quest like that but mine was more of a spirit guide/animal more than what i said up top. lol

    That must have been a hell of an experience. Do you think my interpretation here does the real thing justice?

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    ookamilord wrote:

    i like the aspect of a dark inner self it feels like a fighter game in a way.

    I do really like The King of Fighters Orochi Saga (KoF 96-97), so I likely drew from it subconsciously. blush1

    The dark persona serves two main purposes. First, it is an echo of the invading entity that threatened to consume her in Dark Energy Trilogy. Facing who she was in those few hours serves as her dealing with the trauma done to her psyche. Second, it is a mental block to her full potential. Personally, I have always believed that Ayeka has held herself back. In the series, we see her fight with Ryoko often, and the two always seem to be tied. However, when Ayeka faced Kagato in Universe episode 25, Kagato says that Ayeka “finally evoked Jurai’s power”, as if she never really had. If Ayeka had not really been using Jurai’s power, what was stopping her? Much like Tenchi in the OVA, I theorize that Ayeka is preventing herself mentally, mostly likely due to her royal training or some other trauma.

    ookamilord wrote:

    with the whole mental battle it also felt like a spirit quest in many ways.

    A “spirit quest” is probably the best way to describe Ayeka’s journey in Jurai. My interpretation of Universe‘s conclusion is that Ayeka vacated the throne to be with Tenchi on Earth. What becomes of her then if Tenchi does not choose her? She always defined herself as “the crown princess of planet Jurai”. What is she without that title or the prospect of Tenchi’s affections? Essentially, who is “Ayeka” without reference to Jurai or Tenchi?

    I also admit to being inspired heavily by Literary Eagle’s Confess to You, where Ayeka goes on a harrowing journey to find herself. If you want a very good Tenchi Muyo! story, I would read this one. Lita is an excellent author, and you will get the FEELS. soawesome1

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    ookamilord wrote:

    i will try as soon as i get past the memory stuff and a few writing blocks that im having with some of the future points like when the intro of his insert x amount of great grandparents.

    Actually, I have found the rewriting segments during a writer’s block can tear down the block. While you are rewriting and improving a previous segment, you are thinking about how the story will progress, how it will develop. Many times, that can spur the mind to new ideas that you did not consider in the first iteration.

    ookamilord wrote:

    i even stepped aside and started a bio sheet to try to help me with the mannerism of the characters and even that aint doin so well.

    A reference sheet for all your cast would be a good idea. Writing down your ideas and arranging them before activity working on the story can improve your story. Again, this takes practice and time to develop.

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    While this story is not Tenchi Muyo! fan fiction, I reciprocate the favor of your review of my work.

    This segment serves as an introduction to a fantasy world torn between two armies at war. Prophecy has foretold that the descendants of each side will wed and bring an end to this conflict.

    Overall, this segment was a rough read. As you stated in your original post, you are cognizant of your issues with mechanics, so I would recommend seeking out an outside editor. This option allows for another author to comment and critique the piece as it is developed. I recommend it as it has improved my own writing tremendously.

    Thematically, the piece has a few interesting ideas. The mythos of the different clans and their destinies seems like it could follow a high fantasy route, a variety of races and their unique cultures and abilities. One could dive very deeply into the finer points of how these relationships operate or were established, perhaps even their origins.

    That said, the exposition of these ideas could be improved. In particular, the setting is not particularly well established. The first two pages use the terms and naming conventions of feudal Japan with anthropomorphic fantasy elements. Yet, the following six pages describe a more modern school enviroment. Also, actual real world countries (i.e. the United States) are mentioned. Perhaps an establishing paragraph could set the stage for the reader before being thrust into this blend of fantasy and reality.

    In the same vein, lots of exposition is done in the dialogue. If the characters should already know what the taboos and conventions of the world, those expository lines might best be relegated to descriptive paragraphs. For example, the prejudices against the spirit wolves might be common knowledge to those in this universe, while the reader would be unfamiliar. These facts might be best explained outside of dialogue. Take advantage of the written medium to economize your characters’ words to what they need to communicate to one another.

    The tone of the story seemed inconsistent. For example, the opening segment has the Tenchi clan under attack from the Hojigoku clan, but the respective queens meet and chat like old friends in the midst of the battle. One even is said to have a “cheeful laugh” while battle is raging nearby. Considering the current stakes, one would think that these ladies would be more focused and serious in their demeanor.

    Similarly, characterization seemed inconsistent. For example, the character Megumi is stated by Cody to “act more like my mother than my aunt”, yet she tells a story of him “pissing his pants” near the end of the segment. That does not sound like the actions of a surrogate mother, but rather an older sister teasing her brother. Perhaps that might be a better role for this portrayal of her. Likewise, several centuries-old creatures, such as the Rena and Vardna, childish or petty, contrary to their supposed wisdom and veneration. Perhaps this is an intentional contrast.

    Furthermore, many characters are introduced and then dropped. For example, Blood Pike and Octavian are introdued and join the main party, but then seem to vanish into the background. This becomes cluttered as the characters seem to have served a purpose and then linger unnecessarily. The journey to Sleric’s den might be a good time to expand these characters and develop them. You could give the reader insight into the dynamics of the group, how they work together and learn to appreciate one another. Relegating potential character development to a paragraph of “X taught Y about technique Z” could be seen as a wasted opportunity to show the reader who these characters are, and who they are becoming.

    In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that while this story does seem very rough, it has some potential to be expounded. With some more planning, and your story could be an epic to share with your readers. Invite us on a journey with your characters. Introduce them to us. Show us who they are, not just what they can do. Share with us their tears and triumphs, not just their battles and bravado.

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    ookamilord wrote:

    i enjoyed masaki and at times i felt like a movie or some new episodes to the series. neat idea on nagi and ryoko’s history. cant wait to start on jurai right after i get rid of this migraine. lol

    Thanks for reading. ^^v I still give a shoutout to my former coauthor for the idea of making Ryoko and Nagi sisters. Admittedly, I did lift a lot of motifs from the series proper, particularly the tone of TMiL2. I’m glad that this story seems successfully in-line with the main series. Tenchismile

    I’m eager to hear your thoughts on Jurai. ^^v

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    After a rather long time, I have an update! ^^v I have been writing and speculating on Yosho’s life, as well as that of his tree Funaho, which generated a rather long segment. o.o; So long was this that I had to cut it into two segments to post on Deviantart. O.o;;

  • Homecomings: Masaki – Chapter 3, Part 2a (Funaho’s story)

  • Homecomings: Masaki – Chapter 3, Part 2b (Yosho’s story)
  • For those who are not familiar with Homecomings, worry not. While these segments do tie into my overarching story, they only depend on the what is said in Universe continuity and can be read independently. ^^V I hope you all enjoy. ^^VV

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Dagon123 wrote:

Chrome and IE seem to work fine, for those who are on Safari and other browsers, are you having the same problem?

evilpii wrote:

Simple Reader works fine with Safari.

Technicals for laptop:

  • OS: Mac OS 10.6.8

  • Browser: Safari 5.1.10
  • Resolution: 1280×800
  • I retested Simpleviewer in Safari just now, and I can read the manga just fine. I copied the technicals from my earlier post just in case. ^^v

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