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    evilpii wrote:

    However, a dread hung in my mind as I read forward. My heart feared that the later letters might start referencing her growing ill and, therefore, apart from her son. Waiting for that other foot to fall had my heart in a bit of a knot, but this never did happen. While this might be a missed opportunity, having that well-known fact rise might detract from the story’s main thrust of telling of Achika’s mostly happy life with her husband and son.

    For what it’s worth, I’m glad you did it the way you did Nil. I was feeling the same dread pii describes, as I’m sure any Tenchi fan would, but the fact that it wasn’t there, in addition to all your other good reasons, made it feel more realistic to me somehow. I felt as though if this were Achika writing letters to her child (which she would have shown him someday, making it all the more tragic she never had a chance to show them to Tenchi) she would be focusing on the good times; plus, as you said, I don’t think she saw it coming, so it would maybe have come across as too expositional for her to state “gee, I don’t feel very good today, sure hope I don’t die before writing the next entry” (not literally like that, but, well, you know). Hindsight is 20/20: we know what’s going to happen, but as she’s living life in the moment, Achika has no idea (as none of us do ourselves), so there was no need to call undue attention to it.

    wwwwhhhhoooo
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    OMG Black Lagoon?!! I must be dreaming! With everything I’ve seen thus far, new Toonami is living up to its predecessor (and then some?) and good animu is being broadcast on American television.

    soawesome1

    Nobody pinch me! I ain’t wakin’ up from this!!!

    wwwwhhhhoooo
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    Later is now! Here’s some script notes for episode 2 (first draft)

    I didn’t expect anyone to notice this anyway (and ideally people wouldn’t pay much attention to the nuts and bolts, the idea being a flowing, continuous reading) but for those with very keen eyes there may be a few ever-so-slight differences in my personal use of screenplay format between episodes thus far, mostly stemming from the fact that my re-posts here on the board are not spaced appropriately: nothing hard-and-fast with format rules, just subjective ways of trying to make the rigid nature of a script’s outline flow smoothly at all times; I am currently refining my own “style” in this regard as I consult and (attempt to) recall several different sources for reference.

    Episode 2 in script form ended up shorter page-wise than I had originally anticipated, and in fact may need revising, but 1: the pacing felt much slower, translating to longer screen time with fewer words/pages, and 2: it just felt like a good place to stop (probably doesn’t help that I was typing this way too late into the night); again, I may go back and revise soon, as the ending with Tenchi kissing Ryoko would be an even better cliffhanger ending, time allowing (as shadows envisioned).

    Once again, some smart-ass dialogue added for our favorite smart-ass (Washu) and a bit added for Yosho as well. The onsen scene, as written by shadows, is wonderful: to that end, I focused most of my efforts this go-round into polishing and refining it to be a big, emotional climactic moment. It’s playing on a theme that I’m noticing thus far in shadows work (how will it turn out later? I’m excited to see!): Tenchi’s in despair, and as time marches on the residents of the Masaki household–namely Ryoko and Ayeka–are starting to realize perhaps the never-ending bliss they all shared living together may not in fact be never-ending; the carnival, in short, seems to be coming to an end. It adds a level of drama similar to Tenchi Forever, one which I believe OVA at this point desperately needs (for the fans who have stuck with it for literally decades of their lives). Shadows hit this spot-on, and it’s an honor to work with; as such, in these first episodes I’ve been adding small, interspersed moments of comedic relief, 1: it’s needed sometimes to ease up the heavy tension (I think), and 2: if this was actually to be an animated work, I think producers would demand it.

    Though this may not be what some of us here would like, if Ryoko and Ayeka (and whoever else) end up with Tenchi, effectively ending their long-time feud, there has to be development to warrant it. I applaud Shadows for doing this, as it’s being done so well thus far it’s actually becoming more believable for me. I did my best to maintain this atmosphere of gradual bonding between “frenemies.”

    Shadows has also done an excellent job of finding some sort of plausible conflict and plot to work with now that Tenchi’s reached “God mode” with internal conflicts, “facts of life” circumstances we all have to face as we take on responsibilities and become “grownups,” and relational strain and strife (in addition to making politics of Jurai interesting again). I didn’t really change anything here, only doing what I can to make it fit plausibly within Kaji’s canon (no easy task, I assure you).

    Hope you all like it, I’d appreciate feedback (especially if there are suggestions to make it even better), and be sure to check out Shadows’ original work as we go.

    wwwwhhhhoooo
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    Episode 2

    FADE IN:

    EXT. KATSUHITO’S OFFICE – DAY

    TENYO emerges from Katsuhito’s office, sliding the door closed behind her. She heads towards the house.

    EXT. MASAKI HOUSEHOLD

    TENCHI sits on the steps just outside the door.

    TENYO walks unnoticed up to TENCHI as he sits staring at his folded hands.

    [align=center]TENYO

    Tenchi?[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (looking up)

    Oh, hey Sis. Have a good talk with Grandpa?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    (shrugs)

    Sort of, I guess. How about you? Have a good talk with the girls yet?[/align]

    TENCHI glances over his shoulder toward the door.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Nah…

    (beat)

    …you think they’ll go for it?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    (shrugs)

    Only one way to find out.[/align]

    TENCHI’S gaze returns to his hands.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Yeah. But it’s not just some experiment to ‘find out’ what will happen…not when it’s their feelings at stake.[/align]

    TENYO places her hand gently on TENCHI’S shoulder. He looks up at her.

    [align=center]TENYO

    (smiling)

    You’re always so concerned about others’ feelings, Tenchi, and that’s wonderful…but right now, this is about you’re feelings. Clear everything else from your mind: this is about how you feel.[/align]

    TENCHI looks down at his hands.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    How I feel….[/align]

    TENCHI clenches his hands and stands up.

    TENYO glides past TENCHI and slides the door open for him.

    [align=center]TENCHI (CONT’D)

    Thanks, Tenyo.[/align]

    TENCHI marches confidently through the door with TENYO lingering behind.

    INT. MASAKI HOUSEHOLD

    TENYO slips away towards the kitchen as TENCHI enters the living room.

    RYOKO, AYEKA and MIHOSHI lie fast asleep on the couch, seated upright and leaning on one another.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (clearing throat)

    Ryoko, Miss Ayeka….[/align]

    The three snore on in reply.

    [align=center]TENCHI (CONT’D)

    (sotto voce)

    Once again, I find myself awakening Ryoko….[/align]

    TENCHI walks behind the couch and leans in between their heads.

    [align=center]TENCHI (CONT’D)

    Ryoko, Ayeka–[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (startled)

    GAH![/align]

    RYOKO falls forward off the couch. She drags AYEKA with her, who in turn drags MIHOSHI with her.

    [align=center]RYOKO (CONT’D)

    Tenchi! Um…

    (pointing)

    …Ayeka fell asleep first![/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Hey! You were asleep too, ya know! Besides, Mihoshi here was the first one to doze off![/align]

    All three look over at MIHOSHI, still fast asleep on the floor.

    AYEKA sighs.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (pointing to MIHOSHI)

    Ya want me to–[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (interrupting)

    Never mind, leave her alone. You two are the ones I need to talk to anyway.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Are we in trouble?[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    No, Ryoko.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Is Ayeka in trouble?[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    No![/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Well, then, what is it Tenchi?[/align]

    TENCHI begins to sweat slightly.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Well, I….[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Lord Tenchi?[/align]

    AD LIB TENCHI stuttering before falling flat onto the floor.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Tenchi![/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Lord Tenchi![/align]

    NOIKE emerges from O.S.

    [align=center]NOIKE

    Well, you two are shouting again, which means Tenchi must be back–

    (notices TENCHI – panicking)

    Tenchi![/align]

    NOIKE rushes to TENCHI’S side. She checks his breathing.

    [align=center]NOIKE (CONT’D)

    (relieved)

    Still breathing.

    (beat)

    What did you two do this time?[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (indignantly)

    This time?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    We didn’t do anything! Tenchi just walked in the house and fainted.[/align]

    [align=center]NOIKE

    (under her breath)

    Yeah, right.[/align]

    NOIKE places her palm onto TENCHI’S forehead.

    [align=center]NOIKE (CONT’D)

    He’s just passed out, I think, but all the same go get Washu.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    On it.[/align]

    RYOKO phases into thin air as AYEKA huddles next to TENCHI opposite of NOIKE.

    [align=right]FADE OUT.[/align]

    FADE IN:

    INT. WASHU’S LAB

    TENCHI lies atop a single-mattress bed with various high-tech instruments scanning and monitoring his systems.

    RYOKO and AYEKA stand nervously next to TENCHI’S bedside as WASHU sifts through data on her holographic terminal.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Believe it or not, folks, it appears the most powerful boy in the universe has just suffered a minor anxiety attack.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO AND AYEKA

    (simultaneously)

    Anxiety attack?![/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    Yup.[/align]

    NOIKE, TENYO, SASAMI and RYO-OHKI enter from O.S.

    [align=center]NOIKE

    Is he alright, Washu?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    Oh sure. He just had an anxiety attack.[/align]

    [align=center]NOIKE, TENYO AND SASAMI

    (simultaneously)

    An anxiety attack?![/align]

    [align=center]RYO-OHKI

    (concerned)

    Meow?![/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    What, is there an echo in here? Yes, people.[/align]

    [align=center]SASAMI

    Why, Miss Washu? What happened?[/align]

    WASHU walks towards TENCHI.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Well, I don’t know for sure, Sasami dear…

    (eyes RYOKO and AYEKA)

    …but I’d wager these two had sumthin’ ta’ do with it.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Hey, we didn’t do anything! We were asleep on the couch when Tenchi woke us up, said he had to talk to us, then just collapsed.[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    It’s all true, Miss Washu. Come to think of it, he did look a bit pale before he fainted.[/align]

    TENYO places her cupped hands over her mouth in shock.

    [align=center]TENYO

    Oh no….[/align]

    WASHU stops typing and looks up from her terminal.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Do you…know something, Tenyo?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    Washu, I can’t. Tenchi would be upset.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    Well, it would sure help if I knew what was stressing him out in order to make him better, now wouldn’t it?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    I–I can’t.[/align]

    TENYO’S eyes circle the now-crowded laboratory.

    WASHU examines TENYO’S expression for some time.

    [align=center]WASHU

    (clapping her hands)

    Okay, everybody out! Come on, move it! Too crowded in here as it is.[/align]

    Everyone except TENYO, WASHU and RYOKO slowly shuffle towards the door. RYOKO obliviously hovers near TENCHI in a seated position.

    [align=center]WASHU (CONT’D)

    That means you too, Ryoko![/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Fine, fine, I’m going.[/align]

    RYOKO phases out of view.

    WASHU and TENYO stand in a silence permeated only by WASHU’S machines and TENCHI’S steady breathing.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Well, girly, spill it. What’s up?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    I can’t bring myself to tell you, Miss Washu. But Grandpa should be able to fill you in.[/align]

    WASHU walks away from TENYO seemingly in no particular direction.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Fine. In that case, you watch TENCHI while I go straight to the source![/align]

    Without a word or gesture from WASHU, an inter-dimmensional portal appears in front of her. Stepping inside, WASHU and the portal disappear.

    TENYO stands over TENCHI, looking down on him tenderly.

    [align=center]TENYO

    It’s funny: here I am again, watching over you after all these years, Tenchi.[/align]

    In the unseen shadows of WASHU’S lab, RYOKO hovers high over TENYO, staring precisely where WASHU’S portal appeared only moments ago.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Hmmm….[/align]

    INT. KATSUHITO’S OFFICE

    YOSHO (KATSUHITO) sits at his table sipping a cup of hot tea.

    WASHU’S voice emanates seemingly from within the room, yet she remains out of sight.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Knock, knock! Mind if I drop in?[/align]

    YOSHO turns his attention towards the wall on the far end of the room.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    Of course, Washu, come in, have some tea.[/align]

    WASHU’S portal appears exactly where YOSHO’S gaze is directed.

    WASHU steps through the portal and into YOSHO’S office as if she had walked through the open door.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Thank you, Lord Katsuhito. Ya’ know, you’re the only one who doesn’t seem to mind my little ‘shortcuts’ to and fro.[/align]

    [align=center]YOSHO

    True, most visitors simply use my front door…

    (sips tea)

    …but everyone has his or her own door to walk through, and seldom is there ever only one from which to choose. I should write that one down for later.[/align]

    YOSHO scribbles in a notebook set atop the table.

    WASHU sits at the table across from YOSHO. He pours her a cup of tea.

    [align=center]WASHU

    (sips tea)

    As much as I’d love to talk about doors, or life, or even this fine tea, I’m here to talk about Tenchi.[/align]

    [align=center]YOSHO

    (stops writing)

    Oh?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    He had an anxiety attack today, just as he was about to talk to Ayeka and Ryoko.[/align]

    YOSHO closed his eyes and crossed his arms.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    I see. So Tenyo wasn’t exaggerating. There really is a problem here.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    I’m curious as to what that problem is, exactly. I have a hunch, and Tenyo seems to be in on it, but she wouldn’t tell me the details. She did, however, point me in this direction. Care to elaborate?[/align]

    YOSHO slowly stands and walks towards the window.

    CUTAWAY

    Outside the office RYOKO and AYEKA look away from the window and press themselves against the wall just as YOSHO comes into view.

    BACK TO SCENE

    [align=center]YOSHO

    You know, Washu, after my father named me heir, people immediately began to complain. Despite the arrangement made for Ayeka and me to share the throne, many systems spoke of secession. Then Ryoko attacked: unbeknownst to her or me at the time, she became my way out.

    (turns to face WASHU)

    Of course, that’s how I ended up here. My mother told me much later that even the most contentious systems ceased their grievances when it was revealed that I was missing.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    You attribute Jurai’s relative political stability to your absence, and should you have remained you believe war might have broken out?[/align]

    WASHU smiles subtly.

    [align=center]WASHU (CONT’D)

    If you were anyone other than the Crown-Prince of Jurai, I’d say you were thinking too highly of yourself.[/align]

    [align=center]YOSHO

    (smiling)

    Says the self-proclaimed “Greatest Scientific Genius in the Universe.”[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    (cheerfully)

    Title’s still up for grabs, somebody prove me wrong![/align]

    [align=center]YOSHO

    At any rate, though I did not leave Jurai for such reasons, I remained off-world to ease the tension and make things easier for Ayeka.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    So basically you left everything behind to keep others happy?[/align]

    YOSHO’S glasses glint with sunlight from the window.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    Now, now, Washu, I’m not that dull-witted just yet: you’re setting me up to foolishly portray myself as some sort of saint. My actions were far more selfish than that.[/align]

    YOSHO sits back down opposite of WASHU.

    [align=center]YOSHO (CONT’D)

    But in truth I did think about the on-going situation back home, and the potential repercussions of my return. With such thoughts in my head, combined with my love of Earth’s hills and valleys, I knew making my home here was the right choice.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    You chose your ‘door’ and now Tenchi must choose his: Earth or Jurai, Ryoko or Ayeka….[/align]

    WASHU takes a sip of her tea in mid-thought.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    He wants them both.[/align]

    WASHU hiccups and spills her tea slightly at the revelation.

    A handkerchief appears through a portal behind WASHU as she reaches towards thin air.

    [align=center]WASHU

    (wiping her lips)

    Well, now…why did I not see that one coming?[/align]

    CUTAWAY

    RYOKO and AYEKA lean in towards the door. RYOKO presses her ear against it.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (whispering)

    ‘Both’? Wait, does he mean–[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Shhhh![/align]

    [align=center]WASHU (O.S.)

    (muffled through wall)

    Seems I’ve miscalculated. I figured Tenchi’s anxiety stemmed from choosing one girl over the other.[/align]

    BACK TO SCENE

    [align=center]WASHU (CONT’D)

    But if he chooses both he feels he’s trapped within a paradox: for obvious reasons it likely wouldn’t go over well if Ryoko were made a queen of Jurai…[/align]

    [align=center]YOSHO

    (continuing)

    …and if Ayeka wants to go back to Jurai, he would be unhappy to remain here without her.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    Quite.[/align]

    An uneasy quiet hovers in the confined space of the office.

    [align=center]WASHU (CONT’D)

    Of the two, would Ayeka remaining on Earth not be the more practical solution if she could be persuaded?[/align]

    YOSHO shakes his head slowly.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    Ayeka would be giving up any right to the throne. In her mind, she’d be turning her back on her people. And Tenchi wouldn’t want to keep her from her home.[/align]

    WASHU rubs her chin contemplatively.

    [align=center]WASHU

    Huh. I see your point.[/align]

    WASHU suddenly rises to her feet.

    [align=center]WASHU (CONT’D)

    Well, well, much to do. This predicament may end up causing Tenchi more mental distress in the future.

    (bowing)

    Thank you for the tea, Lord Katsuhito.[/align]

    YOSHO raises his tea cup and smiles as WASHU disappears through her portal.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    (sotto voce)

    There is much on everyone’s mind, today. Good thing I have plenty of tea.[/align]

    YOSHO’S expression tightens slightly. His eyes glance at the door.

    EXT. MASAKI SHRINE

    YOSHO slowly opens the door of his office as if expecting to see someone.

    A gentle breeze passes quietly through the shrine.

    [align=center]YOSHO

    Hmmm…..[/align]

    [align=right]FADE OUT.[/align]

    FADE IN.

    INT. ONSEN – MORNING

    RYOKO sits alone in the bath, staring aimlessly at the glass ceiling of the intricate biosphere.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (ears perking up)

    Huh?[/align]

    AYEKA enters the onsen. She makes eye contact with RYOKO, but neither says a word.

    AYEKA hesitantly slides into the water of a bath adjacent to RYOKO’S.

    Both girls sit in an idle manner quietly washing themselves.

    [align=center]RYOKO AND AYEKA

    (simultaneously)

    We need to talk…Hey, I was first![/align]

    AD LIB RYOKO and AYEKA muttering.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Ryoko…what Yosho said the other day….[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (sipping sake)

    Yeah, about that….[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    I…I can’t force Tenchi to come with me, but…I have certain responsibilities on Jurai that I cannot avoid forever.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (sitting upright)

    Does that mean you’re leaving?[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Yes…eventually. But Tenchi will not be accepted on Jurai, not as Emperor.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (angrily)

    Whaddya’ mean he won’t be accepted?[/align]

    AYEKA stares at her own reflection in the water.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Yosho…the reason he never came back was because he wasn’t accepted. Auntie Funaho faced similar prejudice. If Tenchi were to try to claim the throne, it could cause conflict.[/align]

    RYOKO stares at her own reflection in silence.

    [align=center]RYOKO (V.O.)

    (inner thoughts)

    Why don’t you just say it outright, Princess? Why hold back? It’s me that would be the real problem.[/align]

    RYOKO phases and appears next to AYEKA in her bath water.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Come on, you’re not giving up, are you?[/align]

    AYEKA looks into RYOKO’S eyes. She giggles.

    RYOKO looks back dumbfounded.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Ryoko, are you saying you want me to stay? I thought you might be happy if I left.[/align]

    RYOKO’S cheeks redden.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    What?! No! I mean, yes! Err, whatever….[/align]

    RYOKO takes another drink of sake before AYEKA snatches the bottle from her hand and takes a big swig.

    She then politely hands the bottle back to RYOKO.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (smiling)

    I see. Well, I was raised to take the throne after all…

    (tears welling – still smiling)

    …and, um, I will be leaving, so he’ll just stay here, and…

    (biting her lip)

    …be happy….[/align]

    AYEKA suddenly begins to sob.

    RYOKO looks on anxiously as AYEKA cries. She looks away as she starts to simmer with anger. She looks upwards as tears begin to well in her eyes.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (choking back tears)

    NO![/align]

    RYOKO leaps to her feet and throws the empty sake bottle across the onsen. It shatters O.S.

    AYEKA ceases crying and looks up at RYOKO in shock.

    [align=center]RYOKO (CONT’D)

    I…I won’t let you go![/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Ryoko?[/align]

    RYOKO sniffles a bit before staring at the floor.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    If you left, Tenchi would be unhappy…

    (murmuring)

    …everybody would be unhappy.[/align]

    AYEKA rises out of the bath and places her arms comfortingly on RYOKO’S shoulders from behind.

    AD-LIB RYOKO sniffling quietly.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (softly)

    Okay, okay, that’s enough now. We’ll find a way, alright? We’ll find a way to make it work.[/align]

    RYOKO strides away from AYEKA before wiping her nose.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Thanks, Princess…

    (sniffles)

    …too much warm bath water.[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    And sake, perhaps?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    No such thing. Come on, let’s get dressed and check on Tenchi.[/align]

    AYEKA smiles warmly.

    RYOKO smiles mischievously.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Or we can leave out the ‘get dressed’ part.[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Ryoko![/align]

    The two walk towards the onsen doors with towels draped about their waists.

    As they reach the door, Ryoko turns to face Ayeka.

    [align=center]RYOKO (CONT’D)

    (menacingly)

    If you ever tell Noike that I cried–[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (interrupting)

    Oh, please, as if I’d bother! I’ve got better things to do anyway.[/align]

    AYEKA winks at RYOKO. RYOKO smiles as the two exit the onsen together.

    INT. WASHU’S LAB

    TENCHI rests right where the girls left him. Tenyo sits next to him.

    RYOKO and AYEKA quietly enter the lab and creep up to TENCHI’S bedside.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    How is he?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    Still sleeping, though not entirely peacefully. Must be having quite the dream.[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Did Washu say anything? Any change in his condition?[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    No, but she expects him to wake up on his own soon enough. The only thing she’s prescribed him thus far is rest.[/align]

    RYOKO phases and appears next to TENCHI’S right side, hovering above him.

    TENYO offers AYEKA her seat on TENCHI’S left.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (softly)

    Thank you, Tenyo.[/align]

    [align=center]TENYO

    I’ll give you all some privacy.[/align]

    RYOKO nods at TENYO as she quietly makes her exit.

    RYOKO and AYEKA quietly gaze at TENCHI.

    [align=center]RYOKO (V.O.)

    (inner thoughts)

    Tenchi…I’ve waited so long to hear you say–[/align]

    AYEKA suddenly giggles aloud, unintentionally interrupting RYOKO’S train of thought.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (surprised)

    What’s so funny?[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Do you remember the time we tried using Father’s books to woo Tenchi?[/align]

    RYOKO’S face flushes as she grins embarrassingly.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (laughing)

    Oh yeah. You looked pretty foolish.[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    I looked foolish? You knocked him flat on the ground, then immediately tried to come across as demure![/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (grinning)

    True…but a certain little Ryo-Ohki told me all about a certain anonymous love letter….[/align]

    AYEKA gasps before blushing angrily.

    [align=center]RYOKO (CONT’D)

    You still owe her some carrots, by the way.[/align]

    AYEKA lets out a chuckle before gradually giggling, unable to contain her laughter or hold on to her anger.

    RYOKO begins to laugh heartily. Soon both laugh loudly at one another, not in contest but in good nature.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (stirring)

    Do you think you could hold down the noise?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO AND AYEKA

    (simultaneously)

    Tenchi![/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (sitting up)

    Or not, that works too, I guess.[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    How do you feel, Lord Tenchi?[/align]

    TENCHI rubs his head.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Honestly? My head hurts.[/align]

    RYOKO gently caresses TENCHI’S head.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (softly)

    Oh, Tenchi….[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Huh?[/align]

    [align=center]AYEKA

    We’re just so happy you’re awake![/align]

    AYEKA and RYOKO both wrap TENCHI up in a warm embrace.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (stunned)

    Am I dead?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Say what?[/align]

    RYOKO and AYEKA pull back.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Whatever do you mean, Lord Tenchi?[/align]

    TENCHI gazes at them both silently before hugging them both at once.

    RYOKO and AYEKA gasp in shock.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Sorry, it’s just…I figured I’d have to be in heaven to see you two getting along with each other.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (tearing up)

    Oh, Tenchi! I could hit you![/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    What’s happened, anyway?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU (O.S.)

    You had an anxiety attack.[/align]

    All three wince at unexpectedly hearing WASHU’S voice.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Washu![/align]

    WASHU stands in an unassuming posture near the foot of TENCHI’S bed.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    You nearly gave us all an anxiety attack, Miss Washu.[/align]

    WASHU summons her holographic terminal as she walks around the bed.

    [align=center]WASHU

    How ya’ feelin’ champ?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    I was fine until you showed up.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    (miffed)

    Not you, ya’ dingbat![/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Ugh…like a truck hit me.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    (typing)

    Well, I’m not surprised. Your body can’t keep this up, my boy. You may very well be the most powerful being in existence, but you keep stressing yourself out like this I don’t care how many lighthawk wings you can generate, it won’t be pretty.[/align]

    TENCHI takes a moment to absorb WASHU’S words.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    How long was I out anyway?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    Just the greater part of the day.

    (banishes holographic terminal)

    But everything seems fine now. Take it easy for a while…

    (eyes RYOKO and AYEKA)

    …avoid sources of undue stress, and you’ll be fine.[/align]

    RYOKO and AYEKA silently glare at WASHU.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (gently)

    Lord Tenchi, we need to talk.[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    About what, Ayeka?[/align]

    WASHU summons a pillow cushion to sit on.

    [align=center]WASHU

    You’re right, Miss Ayeka. I should sit in on this as well. I might have a few ideas.[/align]

    RYOKO phases and appears right in front of WASHU’S face.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    What business is it of yours, Mom?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    I don’t think I like your tone, Little Ryoko. You’d benefit from gaining perspective from your elders. But fine, have it your way, I’ll leave you three to it….[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (fidgeting)

    Actually, Miss Washu, I’d like to talk to you and Tsunami.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO AND AYEKA

    (simultaneously)

    Tsunami?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    (to TENCHI)

    About?[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Well, I…I’ve been having this recurring dream lately…a strange dream…yet it feels too real to be an ordinary dream.[/align]

    TENCHI slumps his head.

    [align=center]TENCHI (CONT’D)

    (muttering)

    I’m…I’m….[/align]

    RYOKO gently grasps his hand with hers. TENCHI looks into her eyes, and she his.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (barely audible)

    Scared.[/align]

    AYEKA grasps TENCHI’S other hand.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    You’re scared, Lord Tenchi?[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    About what?[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Please, Washu, just get Tsunami. Then I’ll tell you both.[/align]

    WASHU opens a portal directly behind her before leaping off of her perch.

    [align=center]WASHU

    (banishing pillow)

    Okie Dokie! Be right back.[/align]

    WASHU exits.

    RYOKO and AYEKA caress TENCHI’S hands in silence for several moments.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    It’s alright, Tenchi. Washu will be back with Tsunami very soon.[/align]

    RYOKO leans in to whisper into TENCHI’S ear.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (whispering)

    It’s okay, Tenchi. I’m here. We’re here. Everything’s okay.[/align]

    Several moments later, a portal appears and both WASHU and SASAMI walk through it.

    [align=center]SASAMI

    So what’s the matter, Miss Washu?

    (noticing TENCHI)

    Oh, Tenchi, you’re awake![/align]

    SASAMI rushes to TENCHI’S side.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Hey there, Sasami, good to see you. I’m really sorry, but I need to speak to Tsunami as soon as possible, if that’s okay.[/align]

    [align=center]SASAMI

    Okay, Tenchi….[/align]

    SASAMI closes her eyes. TSUNAMI suddenly appears, her ethereal form standing over SASAMI.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Tsunami, tell us what’s bothering Tenchi.[/align]

    TSUNAMI walks over to Tenchi and places her hand on his forehead.

    WASHU closes her eyes.

    TSUNAMI smiles with her usual warmth as she gazes into TENCHI’S mind.

    Suddenly her face contorts as if reacting to something horrible.

    TSUNAMI pulls her hand away from TENCHI and opens her eyes widely.

    [align=center]TSUNAMI

    Oh my. Washu, Tokimi should see this.[/align]

    WASHU’S eyes still remained closed.

    [align=center]WASHU

    I’ve been trying to contact her. She won’t answer.[/align]

    [align=center]TSUNAMI

    Tenchi, how long have you been having these dreams?[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    I don’t really know. A while.[/align]

    RYOKO and AYEKA look distraught.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Hey, what about Tenchi’s dreams? Dammit! Washu, Tsunami?[/align]

    [align=center]TSUNAMI

    (hesitantly)

    Well, you see–[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (flatly)

    I kill.[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Hmm? Well, sure, you axed Kagato but he was–[/align]

    [align=center]TENCHI

    (interrupting)

    No, not just one, and not just someone evil like Kagato…millions.[/align]

    RYOKO and AYEKA gasp.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    (tears welling)

    Oh, Tenchi, you’d never do such a thing![/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (to TSUNAMI)

    How? Why?![/align]

    [align=center]TSUNAMI

    I don’t know. His dreams are all mixed up. And, in the end….[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    (matter-of-factly)

    He destroys Jurai.[/align]

    RYOKO, AYEKA and SASAMI gasp.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    Why?![/align]

    [align=center]TSUNAMI

    That is not revealed in the dream.

    (to TENCHI)

    These dreams have been becoming more frequent, haven’t they?[/align]

    TENCHI nods solemnly.

    RYOKO leans in closely to TENCHI.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Is that why you haven’t been sleeping well?[/align]

    TENCHI nods gravely.

    RYOKO somberly cradles TENCHI’S head in her arms.

    [align=center]RYOKO (CONT’D)

    Oh, my sweet Tenchi! I’d hoped you’d never have to feel the kind of pain I’ve felt.[/align]

    AYEKA leans in to RYOKO.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    How do you know he hasn’t been sleeping well?[/align]

    RYOKO pauses, blushes, and releases her grip on TENCHI.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (embarrassed)

    I’ve…been watching him sleep at night. Just, sometimes, of course…it calms me when I can keep an eye on him once in a while.

    (concerned)

    But lately, he’s been tossing and turning so much, I didn’t know what else to do–[/align]

    RYOKO stops herself short and averts her gaze from everyone.

    [align=center]AYEKA

    “Didn’t know what else to do”?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Nothing.[/align]

    [align=center]WASHU

    What did you do, young lady?[/align]

    [align=center]RYOKO

    (fidgeting)

    Nothing! Just, sometimes…I’d sing to him. It seemed to calm him down.[/align]

    TENCHI sits bolt upright.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    That was you?

    (beat)

    I…thought I heard singing sometimes in my dreams, and it helped…all along, it was you, Ryoko….[/align]

    RYOKO looks nervously around at everyone before meeting TENCHI’S kindly eyes.

    [align=center]RYOKO

    Your mother used to sing it to you as a child. I often heard it as you two went on walks next to the cave…[/align]

    RYOKO slowly hovers away from TENCHI, towards the center of the room.

    [align=center]RYOKO (CONT’D)

    …I’m glad it helped you as you slumbered, Tenchi, because, well…it helped me when I felt trapped and alone.[/align]

    As RYOKO speaks, TENCHI rises from the bed and gently grasps RYOKO’S hand.

    RYOKO shudders.

    [align=center]TENCHI

    Thank you for watching over me, Ryoko.[/align]

    Tears well up in RYOKO’S eyes as she finds herself unable to reply with anything other than a smile.

    Suddenly TENCHI pulls RYOKO in close and passionately kisses her on her lips.

    EVERYONE gasps, too stunned for words.

    RYOKO’S eyes widen in sheer shock before she slowly wraps her arms around TENCHI’S neck and gives in to her long-imprisoned desire.

    [align=right]FADE OUT.[/align]

    Script notes to come later.

    EDIT: Revised script notes to come very soon.

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    Yosho24 wrote:

    Not really anime related but I just thought i should share this. I was watching Dexter (awesome show btw) on netflix the other day and as i was eating my sandwich in front of my tv, i heard a very familiar voice. I looked up and there was Petrea. Although she only made a very small appearance, it blew my mind. My favorite voice actor from my favorite anime making an appearance on my favorite tv show! colors2

    Season/Episode number pweeeease? WANT1

    & to do my part, I had a very similar experience and reaction as I was watching HIMYM one day. Season 3, Episode 19 “Everything Must Go.”

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    TsukiNoTragedy wrote:

    Hope those of you in the east coast and mid-west of the US stay warm and toasty tonight. Be careful out there, guys!

    ~Tsuki

    Thank you kindly (we need the warm wishes, it’s cold!). Welcome!

    • January 23, 2014 at 7:31 AM
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    ZERO-Ryoko wrote:

    Wait what? OAV4?

    I’ll paay anything to get Petrea on board for a redub.

    I haven’t been up to date with anything Tenchi Muyo wise at all. :(

    Everything that was mentioned in the Podcast about OAV3 really hit it on the nail.

    I haven’t rewatched the series in a long time. Though I’m often quoting from it to my sisters.

    I fair from Vancouver, British Columbia. :)

    BC, nice, haven’t been on that end of Canada before, but it sounds lovely.

    & there’s no official word of OVA4 or anything at this point, I think Nil might be implying it’s likely going to happen someday, but we have recently heard that there is a new anime series on the way soon, we just don’t know for sure what.

    We can help catch you up, though…oh yes, we can remember it for you, wholesale ;)

    • January 23, 2014 at 6:49 AM
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    ZERO-Ryoko wrote:

    I’m currently listening to the Podcast

    http://i1103.photobucket.com/albums/g463/wwwwhhhhoooo/bb457c9f-b068-4750-85b8-4e95cd10b6d7_zpsd43d7fd2.jpg" />

    Thanks for listening! Aaaaoooooooooowwww!!!!

    Welcome 8-)

    (Canada? Which province? I’ve been to Ontario many a times, they’ve never treated me ill.)

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    My reaction: in short, very positive, but allow me to elaborate a bit.

    I’m honestly a bit curious as to how you came up with doing this; I suppose it could be chalked up to an impulse of creative expression? (Which is as good a reason as any.)

    Not having the actual translation fresh in my mind, and obviously not knowing Japanese anyway, I just went with musical rhythm and ma’ feels, and it actually clicked very well. The meter of the music’s rhythm and the composition of your writing (and what I felt out as what I’d guess is the inevitable “proper” synchronizing of the two) seem, for lack of better terminology, in tune and in step with another (están de acuerdo).

    I also think the lyrics alone are lovely. Whoever’s perspective they were or are from, I seem to sense a personal melancholy at work, but not just that; it seems to rise and descend, from despair to hope, back and forth, almost tidal: but each part, ascension or gliding back down (or crashing?) has its own beauty.

    The new perspective is interesting backstory to have provided (funny how you could take something and “reforge” it into something new, isn’t it?) and I personally think it is very fitting, arguably more so than its original muse (though, if revisiting/revising, with this knowledge known prior to reading, may want to consider phrasings like “my love”: not really too odd or out of place otherwise, but as I said, anyone with the foreknowledge you’ve provided might think “oh, yes, this was pieced together from a love song, wasn’t it?” but that’s just me providing as much feedback as I can.

    You have a bard’s soul, if you ask me: the ease with which things poetic, musical and lyrical come to you (combined with, of course, dedication and work no doubt) is indicative of such; but unlike a bard of “ye olde days” you strike me as a true artist–your work is all your own (even when it’s a personalized adaptation) and you (if I may, we, as in all of us of the artistic persuasion) do such things because you don’t know how not to. ;)

    coolguyshades1

    tl;dr: Good on ya, FW, good on ya.

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    I’m going completely off memory from my FUNi viewing of Geminar this past summer, but I’m very drawn to this theory. Now, someone can correct me if I’m wrong, but even factoring in the latest doujin content w/ translation work done (note to self: more brownie points for Crazed), much of Kenshi’s trip to (and from?) Geminar remains ambiguous.

    He was sent by the Chousin/one of the Chousin: well, okay, how? (if it were only a short while ago we would be totally in the dark here, but as the latest Kajishima content seems to suggest, he’s apparently hooked up to a device/teleporter of some kind; one would think the goddesses could have alternatively waved their hands and *poof* he’s on Geminar).

    Is he in direct contact with his family during his stay? Based on the anime, we can safely assume “no” but again, as per Kajishima’s illustrations, it does appear as though his family is watching his adventures and cheering him on as he goes (whether this is done half-jokingly or not is anyone’s guess).

    Is Ryo-Ohki assisting Kenshi in any way, directly or indirectly, during this time? I wouldn’t imagine so, at least not in any way Kenshi could be aware of, but I am reminded of one interesting factoid courtesy of our own ForWashuu:

    http://tenchiforum.com/viewtopic.php?f=19&t=266” class=”bbcode_url”>http://tenchiforum.com/viewtopic.php?f=19&t=266

    Going along his observations and accompanying theory, even this “piece” of Ryo-Ohki on Kenshi’s pendant seems to contain some semblance of her presence, as demonstrated by the koros’ reaction to it (seems evident to me a subtle affirmation of Ryo-Ohki’s presence detectable on some level). More subtle than direct aid, but it’s something.

    Jumping back to the top, if Washu’s device or Tokimi’s direct actions got Kenshi to Geminar, how does he get transported back home (if at all)? Granted, Rea got there somehow, but the anime didn’t provide much in the way of details. Sticking with our theory for theory’s sake, can Ryo-Ohki construct herself if she’s been fragmented? I’m not sure, but thinking back to episode 7 of Tenchi OVA, it would seem that via her crystal form, multiple copies of herself is a non-issue. Could one of these “fragments” of Ryo-Ohki become a spacecraft or vessel to transport Kenshi–and likely his harem (?)–to Earth? I cannot say, but it does make for good, harmless speculation.

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